Wings – by Claudia3
WARNING: PARTIAL REVIEW
As with many of my poorly-rated fic reviews, I only read halfway into this story before skimming to the end.
If anything in my review is inaccurate or misconceived as a result, please feel free to let me know and I will amend my review.
The Basics: Classic Era (GoF-compliant; not compliant with OotP or beyond), Friendship/Romance, Original Characters, 100k
3 years after graduating, Hermione returns to Hogwarts as an Arithmancy professor, working with the staff and the Order in the war against Voldemort.
This fic actually started off rather well; it is only as the story unfolds that one becomes aware of this fic’s many shortcomings. The writing is tolerable, but not enthralling or humorous. The characters, while not necessarily out of character, are sketchy copies of their true selves; slightly bland. There is plot, with some original ideas, but it just wasn’t compelling. Chapter after chapter, I waited for the story to start, for the intrigue to set in, but it just never did.
To add to these missteps, there was one huge tumble – one thing that dropped this fic to a ”Poor’ rating. Halfway through the story the author introduces four original characters – students at Hogwarts – who begin telling the story from their point of view. Snape and Hermione become almost supporting characters to the adventures of these four. What? I was totally confused by this. I sometimes enjoy original characters in fanfiction, but these characters had a huge and unnecessary presence. I felt almost tricked; if these characters had been introduced in the first few chapters, I would have dropped the fic immediately, realizing it was original-character-heavy and not focused on Snape and Hermione. But to introduce them halfway through? Strange.
The bottom line: I would not recommend this fic. The characters are without color or wit, the romance is lukewarm, and the plot is uninteresting. The insertion of four foreground original characters halfway through is clumsy and jarring. Skip it.