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Irresistible by Kabochan

Link: http://ashwinder.sycophanthex.com/viewstory.php?sid=12151

Rating: Troll

The Basics: Half-Blood Prince Era , Romance/Angst, 200k

Warnings: Non-consensual SSHG, Evil!Snape, Violence, Sexual Content, Incest, Hermione/Draco

TRIGGER WARNING, don’t read this fic OR this review if you have problems with non-consensual references.

I HATED this fic.  Rant review ahead, because I am utterly repulsed and angry right now.

I don’t think the author MEANT to write Snape as a manipulative sociopathic rapist, but that’s what she did. The Snape in this fic – despite Hermione begging him to leave her alone, saying “NO”, and physically trying to escape – engages her in unwanted sexual contact over and over again until she finally “gives in” and “falls in love” with him. Not only is this grossly, offensively out of character – it goes so far that I would say Snape is the villain of this story.  (If you care about author’s intent, she thinks that Hermione created the tragedy of the story with her indecisiveness.  LOL NO.)

The story starts with Hermione/Draco. The Hermione/Draco in this fic is beautiful, soft, gentle, and convincing, especially in the early chapters. Almost everyone dies in the Battle of Hogwarts except for Draco and Hermione, who bond through their pain and survivor’s guilt.

Snape, another survivor, decides he wants Hermione (because she’s beautiful, not because of her intellect or personality) and stops at nothing to get her. His plan seems to be to shower her with aggressive, unwanted sexual contact, because he is such a SexGod!Snape that she will eventually be addicted to him and spurn Draco. Both Hermione and Draco beg him to leave them alone, over and over again, but he persists, his sexual aggression becoming more insistent and violent. Horrible bonus: Draco is HIS SON, and he knows it. Undeterred, he still continues wrest Hermione away from Draco by abusing her and convincing her that her body’s positive response means that she loves him (NO.) By the end of the story, Draco Malfoy is a shattered shell of himself, totally destroyed by Snape’s (his father’s!!!!111) machinations.

I don’t insist that Snape be a courteous Romantic Hero; in fact, I give those portrayals bad reviews.  Evil!Snape can be beautifully written, with backstory, shame, and insight.  But this Snape, this sexually aggressive cruel man, is presented as the romantic hero without apology.  This is the heart of the repulsive nature of this fic. The author writes these sexual assaults as though the are sexy and romantic. It was extremely disconcerting and upsetting for me to read. I kept thinking, ‘Maybe I’m over-thinking this,’ or ‘Surely that is the only time.’ I was wrong. I have a strong aversion to reading a self-proclaimed SSHG story that presents a Snape as vile as this.  It’s woefully out of character

In case you think I might be overreacting, here’s a link to some of the comments  You’ll see that most of the readers agree with me and were extremely upset by Snape’s behavior. The author responds politely to most of them, insisting it is not rape because Hermione was conflicted.  That when she said, “NO,” what she meant was, “I don’t know.”  Sorry, but someone who says NO means NO.  And regardless of the ‘was it rape’ question, a Snape who would push someone ‘conflicted’ into having sex is still utterly despicable and woefully out of character.  Read these comments and the author’s reply for yourself and make your own decision.  http://ashwinder.sycophanthex.com/reviews.php?sid=12626&a=1

The bottom line: Hermione is sexually assaulted by Snape for the first half of the fic, and then sexually assaulted by Draco for the second.  Hermione is a helpless, directionless, spineless marshmallow.  Snape is a violent sexual predator lech. It is absolutely not SSHG and does not belong on any SSHG lists.  I only include it here to warn people away from it.

Sekhmet’s Book – by Bellatrix

Links:
Book 1, Sekhmet’s Book – https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1617723/1/Sekhmet-s-Book-COMPLETE
Book 2, Sekhmet’s Rule – https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1672155/1/Sekhmets_Rule

Rating: Troll (Because it’s an UNFINISHED FIC that somehow ended up on a completed list)

The Basics: Phoenix Era, Romance, 150k,

Warnings: NC-17, Pregnancy, Original Characters

THIS FIC IS UNFINISHED!  I am so enraged that I spent this long reading the fic only to find a cliffhanger at the end of Book 1, and an unfinished Book 2.  This should not have even been included here, but I read it because it was on Harmony_Bite’s ‘Completed OOTP Epics.’  She considered it completed because Book 1 was completed, I guess, but because it completes in a cliffhanger…yeah.  Not really complete. The author goes out of her way to write ‘COMPLETE!’ in both the summary and the link itself (seriously, look above!) but it’s not complete AT ALL, because the ending is just like any other chapter! Why would she do this? What a waste of my (and hopefully not your) time.) I suppose I will review it anyway, now that we’re here.

Many years after the fall of Voldemort, Professor Granger and Professor Snape must work together to combat a dark artifact threatening the Hogwarts students and staff.

Right off the bat, there was a huge strike against this fic for me – Hermione and Snape are already in a happy steady relationship when the fic STARTS.  What?  For me, my favorite part of SSHG is watching them fall in love reluctantly, watching them oh-so-slowly come together.  To start off in a relationship eliminates most of the reason I would even be reading this fic.  But because the writing seemed decent, I decided to continue on.

This is a very slow fic.  The ‘warplot’ is just about non-existant in the first third of Book 1.  For the second third, there is a ‘tragic misunderstanding’ that is super annoying and hard to read.  Which lasts for AGES.  The final third picks up a bit, only to end in a huge cliffhanger.  Book 2 is unfinished.  The overall story is really dragged down by pointless (though interesting) original characters and little subplots that are introduced for seemingly no reason except to extend the action, which is really annoying.  This all sounds terribly negative; but there are still some redeeming qualities to this fic.

What this fic misses in the ‘big picture’ it makes up for in details.  The writing is very readable.  It’s not Shakespeare, but it’s pretty good for fic-quality writing.  Hermione and Snape are both relatively in character.  The dark artifact and the ideas of the warplot are interesting and fairly original.  I loved the idea of ancient Egyptian Dark Magic – I had not heard or thought of that before.  The original characters are well-conceived and believable, if a little useless to the overall plot.

The big problem with this fic is simply the lack of planning; the scatter-brained ness of each character and each plotline.  If the erroneous plotlines and characters were cut out, this would be a very short fic.  There might not be anything left.  Major and minor plots almost ALL felt pointless – because they were unrelated to the main plot.  Everytime a new character or subplot was introduced, I felt annoyed.  It felt like an artificial extension; padding.  A good fic’s plot should feel organic and page-turning; this was the opposite.  It took me almost a week to read.  It’s like stream of consciousness story plotting – whatever popped into the writer’s head was inserted into the story.  It’s unusual to have such high quality writing paired with such scattered ideas.

The bottom line:  The writing is good, the story plotting isn’t.  Read this if you love epic-length fics and are willing to put up with lots of padding and plot-stretching.  Read it for the smut, read it for a few original ideas.  Skip it if you must have a satisfying romantic arc and a well-structured story.  SKIP IT IF YOU LIKE TO READ COMPLETED FICS.